Weight Watcher
This morning I went to a Weight
Watchers meeting with a friend of mine.
When we walked in it looked like a mini store. They had Weight Watcher products lined up on
the shelves. I saw rows of different
foods, and cookbooks. My friend got
inline, and I stayed closer to the shelves that had the food on them. There was a long counter with several women
standing behind it. In front of the
counter were black platforms. The ladies
called each person up to the counter, and took a little booklet from them. After they looked at the booklet they had
them step up on the platform, and then they printed out a sticker, and put it
in the little booklet.
Now that my friend was done with her
weigh in we went into the next room. This
room had a bunch of chairs lined up, and several posters on the wall. One of the posters was the food pyramid, and
another was about the points program. In
the far corner there was before, and after pictures of other Weight Watcher
people. The room filled up fast with a
bunch of different people. There were
mostly women, but also a few men. There
were people of all ages. Most of the
people found their own little group within the group. All the little groups were having their own discussions
about how they think they did this past week.
The leader arrives, and the meeting
begins. They call the lady who guides
the meeting the leader. She seemed to be
very nice, and welcoming. The meeting
starts with them awarding some of the people with charms for how much weight
they have lost. The leader asks them to
please share with the group what helped them the most on their journey. One woman said “If you nibble, you must
scribble.” Meaning if you eat something
you must keep track of it. Another woman
said “Having the Weight Watchers pre-packed snacks in my pocketbook helps me
keep on track.”
The leader goes over to the dry erase
board, and asks people for their favorite recipes. She starts writing “Fried Chicken”, “Macaroni
and Cheese”, “Broccoli Casserole”, and several more. She asks if we know how we can make these
dishes healthier to eat. They all start
yelling out suggestions, “use butter substitute”, “use canola oil instead of vegetable
oil”, “bake don’t fry”. She encourages
them, and adds a few ideas of her own.
The leader tells them that for next week she would like each one of them
to come in with two recipes. One recipe like
how they would have made it before and one recipe how they would make it
healthier.
It’s time to wrap up the meeting and
the leader asks everyone if they have anything coming up this week they need
help with. A man speaks up, and says “this
week at work they are having a cookout, how do I keep from eating all my
favorites?” The leader says “You can get
a few of your favorites, but just a smaller portion.” Another woman says “have
a piece of fruit before the cookout.”
Someone else suggests “Drink plenty of water before the cookout, this
way you fill up on water.” The leader
agrees, and tells them they have given great suggestions.
The leader leaves the room, and some
people stay behind talking. They
encourage each other, and chit chat about what they have planned for the next
week. Some of the people went into the
first room to buy Weight Watcher products.
They all keep moving in the direction of the parking lot, but they keep
talking with each other. Eventually they
crowd disperses, and everyone gets into their cars.
I found it to be a very interesting
collection of people. There were men and
women, and there were people of all ages.
There were a few girls in their early twenties, and there were many
ladies in their fifties. Some of the
people didn’t look over weight at all, but they had been doing Weight Watchers
for years. It was a nice experience seeing
people who didn’t know each other come together and try to help each other with
their battle with food.
A good draft here, well organized and cleanly written. I like the dialogue you include of the meeting itself and the advice people offered to the cookout man.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing I'd suggest you might do in revision is (if you can remember) use some sharper details, show some particular people and a bit more in terms of dialogue. For example, your description of the people at the meeting ("The room filled up fast with a bunch of different people. There were mostly women, but also a few men. There were people of all ages.") is quite general. You might instead show a few particular people. Imagine you had been making a video about the subculture. You would likely have panned the camera to focus in on a few people. You can do the same thing in words.